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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to apply for a place to the trip to the United States in October 2018 with the high school .....
First of all, I agreed with my parents to work on them farm during next summer for being allowed to travel to the United States. Then I've never travelled out of France save one time in Holland.
That's why travel to the United States is a very interesting opportunity, wich is going to make me improve. English is such a beautiful language and speak English fluently is one of my goals.
Moreover I'm very enthusiastic and motivated about the exchange. Meet an American student and his family can be rewarding, firstly for see the "real American life" and next for speak English with Anglicans.
I am looking forward to hearing from you,
Yours Sincerely,
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for a place on the trip to the United States in October 2018 with the ... high school. First of all I agreed to work on my parents’ farm with my them to be allowed to travel to the United States. I’ve never traveled outside of France apart from one time when I went to Holland. That’s why travelling to the United States is a very interesting opportunity which is going to help me improve my English speaking abilities. English is such a beautiful language and one of my goals is to speak English fluently. Moreover I’m very enthusiastic and feel motivated by the exchange. Meeting an American student and their family can be rewarding as firstly it will allow me to experience the “real American life” and allow me to speak with native English speakers. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your sincerely ...