Hi!

I have to answer the second question in my job application form. Could you please help me rewrite the answer in a better way and more natural English please?

2) Describe yourself in the words of an imaginary, fair and impartial critic.

I would mostly consider myself as a focused and mindful teacher who is genuinely concerned about my students comfort, engagement, and learning — even if sometimes I may not know exactly how to handle every classroom situation with equal wisdom and ability. I may not come across as an 'expert' — I am still learning the details and the higher skills of teaching — but more of a sincere long-term enthusiastic teacher. My main challenges appear to be discipline and occasionally organisation. I think I am often too nice-acting with students, who may take advantage and act out. Another thing I notice about myself: I get along quite well with both Turkish and foreign staff, am quick to smile, and have an easy-going and cooperative spirit that is much appreciated in the sometimes stressful atmosphere of the school staffroom.

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Hi!

I have to answer the second question in my job application form. Could you please help me rewrite the answer in a better way and more natural English please?

2) Describe yourself in the words of an imaginary, fair and impartial critic. 

I would mostly consider myself as a focused and mindful teacher who is genuinely concerned about my students comfort, engagement, and learning — even if sometimes I may not know exactly how to handle every classroom situation with equal wisdom and ability. I may not come across as an 'expert' — I am still learning the details and the higher skills of teaching — but more of a sincere long-term enthusiastic teacher. My main challenges appear to be discipline and occasionally organisation. I think I am often too nice-acting with students, who may take advantage and act out. Another thing I notice about myself: I get along quite well with both Turkish and foreign staff, am quick to smile, and have an easy-going and cooperative spirit that is much appreciated in the sometimes stressful atmosphere of the school staffroom.

kazul · Answer

Your English is already pretty natural, so I'm just going to make a few small suggestions!
1. Don't forget the apostrophe in "my students' comfort."
2. Instead of "nice-acting," I would say "easy-going" or perhaps "I try to create a relaxed and supportive environment for the students, but sometimes I am not firm enough with troublemakers."
3. This is more of a cultural thing - it depends on where you're applying.  If you're looking for a job in the US, I think this is a perhaps little too modest.  You mention several weaknesses - not being an expert, discipline, organisation, and classroom control - and only a few strengths.  I would add another sentence at the beginning giving an example of something impressive you've done as a teacher.

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