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The effects of discrimination

There are the variety of discriminations. For example, racial , sexual,and so on .But I think racial discrimination is the most common in the world. Although many people are friendly to others , there is no denying that some people still have the prejudice to others.I think discriminations can happen almost everywhere .If a person is different from others and people don't have enough recognize about he or she, then the discrimination will happen .
One year ago, I traveled to a foreign country .When I went to a clothes store and wanted to buy a beautiful dress, the clerk came and asked me to go out. He also told me that he won't sell clothes to yellow people . After hearing those words, I started crying and ran away. Since then, I have become very careful if I want to buy things in a foreign country , for I'm afraid this will happen again. I think discrimination shouldn't happen. And we can solve this phenomena by education. If every family and teacher teaches their kids and students about the effects of discrimination ,then they will have more empathy and have the ability to condone people different from them.

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Can you help me to revise it? Thank you very much. 💓

The effects of discrimination

There are the variety of discriminations. For example, racial , sexual,and so on .But I think racial discrimination is the most common in the world. Although many people are friendly to others , there is no denying that some people still have the prejudice to others.I think discriminations can happen almost everywhere .If a person is different from others and people don't have enough recognize about he or she, then the discrimination will happen .
   One year ago, I traveled to a foreign country .When I went to a clothes store and wanted to buy a beautiful dress, the clerk came and asked me to go out. He also told me that he won't sell clothes to yellow people . After hearing those words, I started crying and ran away. Since then, I have become very careful if I want to buy things in a foreign country , for I'm afraid this will happen again. I think discrimination shouldn't happen. And we can solve this phenomena by education. If every family and teacher teaches their kids and students about the effects of discrimination ,then they will have more empathy and have the ability to condone people different from them.

Addie · Accepted Answer

There are many types of discrimination.

Althought most people are friendly to each other, there is no doubt that some people are still prejudice towards others.

I think discrimination (not discriminations)

For example, if a person is different from others and people don't know enough about him or her, discrimination may happen. (You should pick a more specific example, like about a person's race, ethnicity, or religion that makes him or her different)

When I went to a clothes store and wanted to buy a beautiful dress, the clerk came up to me and asked me to leave.

After hearing those words I started to cry and I ran away from the store.

Since then, I have been very hesitant if I want to buy things in a foreing country, because I'm aftaid that I will be discriminated again.

I think discrimination shouldn't happen and... (combine the two sentences)

Addie · Answer

@sylvialove you're welcome! Glad I could help :)

@sylvialove you're welcome! Glad I could help :)

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